script editing.

When I'm not working on my own stories, I'm usually stepping in on other projects to dissect the script and help make it healthier. Sometimes, it's a simple dialogue punch up or a tightening of action lines to reduce page count and help it go into production. Other times, it's a full-on restructure, entirely new scenes, complete character changes, and whatever else it takes to make that story work and make you bawl your eyes out.

Here's a short sample below of what that might look like. And if you need someone to edit your script, send a carrier pigeon or an email to contact@mouloudkay.com 📋

view sample

the changes I made.

So you know what to look for when reading the two versions.

• Action: I tightened the lines for rhythm and clarity. Replaced some dialogue with visual cues: a glance or gesture that says more than words.
• Dialogue: by the time this scene happens in the script, we already know a lot. So I cut exposition and added subtext. Let characters dodge, deflect, drift-off, or drop hints instead of stating things outright.
• Scene structure: I trimmed and repurposed beats that stalled the scene. Gave moments more narrative weight so the scene flows toward a cleaner payoff: like reframing the line about Paige not studying, so it actually lands.